BrainKing - Forums de discussion (Poetry)

modifié par ΜīήďSрŷ (4. Avril 2006, 02:21:06)

There are times when you have to let go of the love you have grown so used to.
There are times when joyous moments turn flatly undesirable, dreams for the future cease, only to be forgotten.

In these times a heart that once beat in harmony with the universe, now is hallow, and echoes hurt.
The heart falls on hard ground, shattering, scattered pieces, later turning to dirt.

There are times love turns to hate, caring is no longer necessary, and comfort goes away.

Now lord, I ask this of you. Can you bring my heart back from the dirt? Take away every ounce of echoed hurt? Replace the comfort; the caring, the joyous moments I so loved?

My lord, now finally I can feel peace. Now I can leave this world, my heart hurts no more.
The lord has answered my prayers, giving me everything I have asked for.

MindSpy

4. Avril 2006, 02:29:01

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ΜīήďSрŷ: Is this s poem? Reads more like a text, but a beautifully written one.

4. Avril 2006, 03:05:02

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رضا: any words that are beautifully written,
can be a poem. am i right?

4. Avril 2006, 04:25:11

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ΜīήďSрŷ: Agreed.

4. Avril 2006, 12:55:19

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ΜīήďSрŷ: I wouldn't agree, no. Maybe that's because the poems in farsi, my own language, are more than just beautifully written words. There are many features in each of them that are beyond my abilities to explain them. I have read many so-called poems in english, but none are even close to the Farsi poems I have read. I am almost certain poetry and literature can never be any more beautiful than what we have in Farsi.

But your words were quite nice. I don't mind if you call them a poem. I am accustomed to poems that differ from ours.

4. Avril 2006, 16:42:29

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رضا: after re-reading the poem, i have to say, it was badly written, but it has a good point. was drinking gin last night :0) but! on regards to your saying beautifully written words, are not poetry; for the reason they don't rhyme; i don't think you know what you're talking about. sorry, take no offence. :0) farsi poetry from what i heard is the best of all languages. only when it's kept in true text. english doesn't translate it well, simply because we don't have the right words to describe what's going on. i'll admit that. some say poetry came from iraq, others persia, etc... they were the teachers, and inventors of our wonderful myths we have today! so, i'll agree of the great beauty of what you were writing of. :0)

4. Avril 2006, 20:48:18

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ΜīήďSрŷ: Quite the reverse. I exactly know what I'm talking about. In Farsi we have poems, which have their own specifications, and we have very beautifully written words, that do rhyme, but are not called poems. I guess things are different in our cultures!

Yes, Farsi is beautiful only when you understand the original text. The translation almost never works. Farsi is indeed a poetic language. Because of its certain qualities - for example many sentences can be written in many forms, all meaning the same, or some sentences that look just like one another, but you read them differently and they thus mean differently, etc. - it can perfectly be used to make poems and other literal masterpieces.

4. Avril 2006, 21:42:12

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رضا: i've know people that read farsi, and tried to explain to me, but couldn't.
didn't sound very good to my ears. but i'll get off this subject. i enjoy the music, and calligraphy, more than the poetry.

4. Avril 2006, 12:29:39

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رضا: You are right, Reza, it's beautifully written. BTW...just checked out your profile & I really like it.

4. Avril 2006, 12:58:35

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The Usurper: Ah, thank you. Pitty you cannot read the Strange Farsi poem written in my profile. Look at its 'looks' and see if you get anything interesting.

The words correspond to one another regarding the written form, and the pronounciation and meaning. A strong bound that cannot be cut so easily.

I have posted a long farsi poem n this board, look below and you'll see it. Try reading the pronounciation part, Yes I know it's very hard to read something from it's pronounciation!, and you'll get the beauty of it.

Harly has agreed to send people the song if they wish to hear it. So feel free to ask her about it.

4. Avril 2006, 13:25:36

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رضا: Trying to follow the pronunciation is probably more than I can handle. lol I'm certain it's very beautiful & the poem is profound, speaking of a deep connection to the land...something so many of us have lost.

4. Avril 2006, 20:50:06

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The Usurper: Just to make it easy for yourself, you can ask Harley to send the song to you. I've already sent it to her. The singer does 'READ' the poem for you! and you can look at the English trascription an dfollow it, that's if you like to, of course!

No Push.

5. Avril 2006, 00:15:11

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رضا: I'll ask Harley.

4. Avril 2006, 11:52:24

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