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Beyond the Bermuda Triangle 9. July 2006

Jim was flying his lear jet over Cuba on his flight to Brazil. He was a representative of a coffee company in Florida who was checking on companies in South America. All of a sudden all his gages were malfunctioning and he was loosing control of his plane....

...He found out a bird had hit one of the engines...

...Suddenly, the plane started to dive!

...The engine sputtered and choked as it tried to stay alive...

...As his plane spiraled down out of control Jim spotted a flash of emerald and tan through the clouds. As his plane sank lower he realized it was an island in a part of the ocean where no island should be.

...Was his fantasy becoming true?

...What fantasy was that?

...The island was incased in a fog or clouds. Soon his plane floated down. Till it reached the island.

...The fatiague from such a disorienting experience had caused Jim to question his perception of his surroundings.Could it be?......could that really be a Chuck E Cheese in the distance?

...Jim had dozed off and woke hours later on the island and his plane was no where in site. No wreckage whatsoever.

...He saw the Chucky Cheeser again and discovered that the island fabricated marages of what ev er you think about.

13. Août 2006, 01:36:13

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modifié par Papa Zoom (13. Août 2006, 01:36:38)

Groucho: "What strange place is this?" Jim thought. "Whatever one thinks about, the Island creates a mirage of it. "

Suddenly it occured to him that such a situation could lead to trouble. What if he were thinking of something that led to a dangerous or even deadly mirage?

He hardly had time to think about that last question when a shudder surged throughout his body. Was he now seeing things? What was his last thought? He didn't have time to wonder any longer. Something was moving in the distance. Something big. And it was coming his way.....

13. Août 2006, 21:49:39

The Col

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modifié par The Col (13. Août 2006, 22:49:52)

Groucho: The very idea that Jim could manifest his own best or worst fears intrigued Jim.For to even dread the worst meant he must at least revisit that minefield of emotions.

14. Août 2006, 06:22:38

*BOB*on*Bush*

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Jim Dandy: the ground trembled, the trees shook in the distance... it reminded him of the old king kong movie... coconuts were falling everywhere... BOOM! earth geysered! BOOM! BOOM! ROARRRRrrrrr! The giant ape retreated in anger! the coconuts were setting off land mines! jim thought "oh this is just dandy" and forced himself to think of 'good' thoughts...

14. Août 2006, 20:57:49

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*BOB*on*Bush*: But no matter how hard he tried, the huge ape just wouldn't disappear. Land mines continued to explode as coconuts continued to fall. Suddenly, another huge creature appeared in the distance. "How can that be?" thought Jim. "I wasn't thinking of a creature of any kind!" Then just as suddenly, the huge ape disappeared and the explosions ceased. But the beast in the distance grew bigger and bigger as it came closer and closer.

"This is madness!" Jim screamed as he desparately thought of peceful things. A quiet stream running through the valley appeared. That was Jim's thought. But the beast wasn't. And then it suddenly occured to Jim. Not only was he not alone, but the thoughts of others became a reality to him as well! It was one thing to control his own thoughts but the thoughts of another? Impossible.

And then he saw the other. The person was running towards him with the beast following. They were too far away to tell if it was a man or a woman. But whoever it was, the beast was chasing after them. And both of them were running straight towards Jim.

14. Août 2006, 22:03:07

The Col

Sujet: Re: The story so far:

modifié par The Col (14. Août 2006, 23:22:06)

Groucho: Then,all at once Jim sensed a presence from behind.The ape had returned and was running its fingers through his hair while making grunting sounds.In an act of defiance Jim swung around and screamed at the top of his lungs "get your stinkin paws off me you dirty Ape."

Edited to remove a word

19. Août 2006, 04:29:57

*BOB*on*Bush*

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Jim Dandy: THUMP...THUMP...THUMP...THUMP... Jim looked up at a placid Kong... SCREAM! They both looked towards the high-pitched SCREAM source but saw the T-Rex first! It was bearing down on a golden haired slight woman in a flowing flimsy white wrap, who gathered herself and dove into the deep blue stream...

Jim pointed- Well don't just stand there king! Go save her! Help her!

The giant ape ROARED and sprang forward covering ground fast and low... almost losing Jim as he jumped on and clung on to the ape's hairy calf with both hands...

The T-rex skidded to a stop on the thick green verge at the stream and BELLOWED a challenge back!

21. Août 2006, 03:49:09

Foxy Lady

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Out from the woods comes a Fox with a few mouse traps and sets them around the island.

21. Août 2006, 03:54:23

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Foxy Lady: But that tricky little mouse isn't about to be fooled by the mouse traps. He's seen them before and knows how to avoid them. Meanwhile, the mouse is occupied staring back into the eyes of the stranger.

21. Août 2006, 04:10:13

ScarletRose

Sujet: Re: The story so far:

Groucho: Sorry.. I am not writting a childrens story.. I shall remove my posts..

21. Août 2006, 05:05:26

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ScarletRose: Well that's the nature of the storyboard problem isn't it. Look at the previous lines of the story. It started out seriously and then it took a turn for the silly. We have apes, chuckie cheeze, and t-rex running around. What am I supposed to do? Were you adding to that story or starting a new one? Now I'm really confused. How am I supposed to deal with what people write? You tell me.

21. Août 2006, 05:07:41

ScarletRose

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Groucho: I was adding to the story.. I actually sat and focused on what I wrote.. I just didn't write a quick line to get a laugh.. and then have the next several posters make light of it.. If they want to contribute I think they should at least make a better attempt at it.. Geez.. if they would just read what had been written I wrote something that actually blended in with everyone's input..

21. Août 2006, 05:15:28

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ScarletRose: Well, I'd like to leave your post because you actually raise an issue I wanted to raise anyway. If you look where I had reposted the entire story, from there is wasn't long before it took a silly turn. I even had to delete one post because I was trying to keep the story on the serious level.

On the one hand I want to allow for some "fun" and sillyness but I also realize it will distract from the hard work of others and the story may fizzle. On the other hand, I don't know when to delete an addition or even if I should. I don't want to be that critical. Obviously some people have the writing gift and others do not (I don't consider myself necessairly gifted in that area.) I tried to give some guidance from the above guidelines but unless serious writers participate, it may be difficult to get a good story going.

BTW, so it's clear (this is to everyone reading this) I am not referring to the "mouse" addition. That was clearly a joke. :)

If anyone has a good suggestion, I'm all ears. I'll repost the "story so far" after some discussion has taken place. ;)

23. Août 2006, 01:57:54

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Groucho: I think that if someone starts a story and others can add to it, then, whoever adds to the story makes the twist or the turn. I don't think it is fair to say "This has to be serious" or "This can be silly." The thoughts and ideas of those who participate are what counts and what makes the story original. I would not like to be in your shoes and have to decide "Which way do I want the story to go." This is getting wayyyyyyy complicated. :)

23. Août 2006, 02:06:23

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The Whisper: I agree and learned that lesson. What you have just posted is right on and is the only way to run a story tag/chain story. I hope people aren't getting the idea that that is what I am proposing. I've changed my former point of view on it pretty much to what you just posted below. ;) (you said it well)

23. Août 2006, 02:23:30

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Groucho: (Smiling)...thank you! I think that this makes the most sense.

23. Août 2006, 02:36:10

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The Whisper: If it's ok I'd like to use a few of your words in the guidlines for StoryTag.

My plan is to have this board offer several story related activites (but not to take place at the same time). I think it can be fun :)

23. Août 2006, 02:38:25

Sujet: Re: The story so far:

Groucho: I don't mind at all. Which words would you like to use?

23. Août 2006, 02:41:21

Sujet: Re: The story so far:

modifié par Papa Zoom (23. Août 2006, 23:39:26)

The Whisper: if someone starts a story and others can add to it, then, whoever adds
to the story makes the twist or the turn. I don't think it is fair to
say "This has to be serious" or "This can be silly." The thoughts and
ideas of those who participate are what counts and what makes the story
original

And Floozie said something I'll probably include as well. Pluse other suff. I'm working on it now. :)

23. Août 2006, 02:55:39

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Groucho: Cool by me! What did Floozie say? I'm wondering....

23. Août 2006, 02:59:00

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The Whisper: "If people choose to make long, descriptive posts, that's great. If
people choose to make short to the point posts, they should have that
right too. Being this is a public board, all posts should be encouraged
as long as they are on topic."

21. Août 2006, 05:14:06

Foxy Lady

Sujet: Re: The story so far:

Groucho: Let's get this story ended and start fresh by your guidelines.

21. Août 2006, 05:21:02

Sujet: Let's get this story ended and start fresh by your guidelines.

Foxy Lady: That may be a good idea. But I would suggest that when we start a new story we decide ahead of time if it's to be silly or serious and the starter gets to decide. Then everyone must follow that.

Story tags can be so much fun but peeps have to work together and SR is right that additions must "blend in" to others imput to the story.

21. Août 2006, 05:25:05

Foxy Lady

Sujet: Re: Let's get this story ended and start fresh by your guidelines.

Groucho: Thats a good idea let's start a new.If the story is serious let's keep it that way or vice versa being funny.

21. Août 2006, 05:27:57

ScarletRose

Sujet: Re: Let's get this story ended and start fresh by your guidelines.

Groucho: I happen to enjoy the current story.. it shows unique imagination.. It would just be nice if others offered new characters.. and took those roles on..

I certainly don't think we should change stories.. I just think that it should be stated that this is impromptu.. those who make additions should realize longer posts with more details would be more appreciated than a quick one-liner.. which leads really to nothing..

for instance.. in my earlier addition.. I made my character run towards Jim.. I didn't say Jim.. I left that open.. but, it was to be assumed it was Jim.. since the earlier bits and pieces suggested someone was running towards him.. I not only blended.. but, I created a new character.. one that could respond.. it would be even better if others were to assume characters.. whether they were the T-Rex or the Pteranodons swooping down and attacking my hair.. That is the frustrating part of this..

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Glancing all around she turns and runs directly toward a figure in the distance. The Pteranodon drops even lower and nips a bit of her hair, he swooshes upward shuffling a breeze and a clasp of blond tresses hangs lightly out of his clenched bill. Grabbing at her scalp she steps up her pace and screams a bit.. but, exhaustion soon took over and she collapsed onto the ground.. Looking up she swings her hand to shield her eyes and stares directly into the eyes of.....

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21. Août 2006, 05:31:32

Sujet: Re: Let's get this story ended and start fresh by your guidelines.

ScarletRose: Ok, let's wait to hear from a few others and then decide ;)

21. Août 2006, 16:13:46

The Col

Sujet: Re: Let's get this story ended and start fresh by your guidelines.

Groucho: I'm sorry if I took the storyline off course

21. Août 2006, 18:04:57

Sujet: Re: Let's get this story ended and start fresh by your guidelines.

Jim Dandy: No worries. It's not the end of the world. I think different people have different expectations and different levels of expertise in all this. I kinda screwed up SR's entry too. We'll get it all sorted out. ;)

21. Août 2006, 21:36:55